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    Quote Originally Posted by IndigoSunset View Post
    The phrase "I used to" is beautiful in that regards
    In terms of sports, it's even easier to do: "I played a lot of sport in high school and whilst time has been more limited since then, I still love to play soccer when I get the chance." Otherwise, do you have any other interest or hobbies outside of computers?

    Hmm. I can't think how to reword it right now, I'll have to get back to you. This is normally my forte too :s

    Ah, well if you've been taught to do it that way then I guess leave it. But for most jobs you'll send a CV with a covering letter and it will be in the covering letter that you state for what position you are applying.



    Except that on a CV, space is at a premium. If something on there isn't: Showing you're clever; Showing you're good for the job; Showing you're human; Showing you're interesting: then it shouldn't really be there. Obviously this debate is mostly moot since you'll tailor your CV to each job anyway, but your basic CV should be written in the specialist language for the field to which you are applying. Restating a job description in layman's terms doesn't embolden a point, it just restates the description.
    Awesome, thanks

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    Quote Originally Posted by IndigoSunset View Post
    Except that on a CV, space is at a premium. If something on there isn't: Showing you're clever; Showing you're good for the job; Showing you're human; Showing you're interesting: then it shouldn't really be there. Obviously this debate is mostly moot since you'll tailor your CV to each job anyway, but your basic CV should be written in the specialist language for the field to which you are applying. Restating a job description in layman's terms doesn't embolden a point, it just restates the description.
    Taking the form of only a few words per point, I think summarising actually ticks all your boxes, for a very efficient price in terms of space. It is my opinion that this would help this particular resume maintain coherency, without any notable sacrifices in accuracy.

    Driven by the desire to not only make things better but to better myself while I do it.
    I'd either remove or rephrase this part, by the way. I understand what you're trying to do with it, but I think if you want to do that, it could be done better. Although it adds a "human touch", I think it does this at the cost of some professionalism. I'd be in favour of simply getting rid of it, in order to free up some space.
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    I like it overall, it's a great start.

    I'd encourage using italics/bold/underline to distinguish different sections/headers/titles (which you have covered, so maybe you did)

    I don't think a summary is necessary. In my technical resume, i have Education, Professional Experience and Software/Skills.

    I disagree with the "ditch the jargon" statement because many companies today use resume scanners to pick out key words for skills you might have, you actually want to strive to include those kinds of words they may look for (such as programming languages).

    Try to expand a little more on what you did in each position, you have room to, use it! (try to keep it to 1 to 2 lines though, and try not to leave 1-4 words hanging on the second line, either pad it or chop it down). Try to start with action words like "provisioned" "developed" "coordinated" "provided", etc; stuff that shows what you *did* there. You have them for the most part, but you might try looking up more "resume action words" and think about how you can apply them to your jobs.

    Include your graduation date (or expected one) as well as gpa in your education.

    Also try to include any clubs, sports, or even (semi relevant) group projects you may have done in school that could a) give you something to talk about and b) show you are well rounded.
    Last edited by lilangel; 01-11-2012 at 06:34 PM.

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    Quote Originally Posted by lilangel View Post
    I like it overall, it's a great start.

    I'd encourage using italics/bold/underline to distinguish different sections/headers/titles (which you have covered, so maybe you did)

    I don't think a summary is necessary. In my technical resume, i have Education, Professional Experience and Software/Skills.

    I disagree with the "ditch the jargon" statement because many companies today use resume scanners to pick out key words for skills you might have, you actually want to strive to include those kinds of words they may look for (such as programming languages).

    Try to expand a little more on what you did in each position, you have room to, use it! (try to keep it to 1 to 2 lines though, and try not to leave 1-4 words hanging on the second line, either pad it or chop it down). Try to start with action words like "provisioned" "developed" "coordinated" "provided", etc; stuff that shows what you *did* there. You have them for the most part, but you might try looking up more "resume action words" and think about how you can apply them to your jobs.

    Include your graduation date (or expected one) as well as gpa in your education.

    Also try to include any clubs, sports, or even (semi relevant) group projects you may have done in school that could a) give you something to talk about and b) show you are well rounded.
    Where would I include group projects?

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    Quote Originally Posted by ./m View Post
    Where would I include group projects?
    In your education section, for instance:

    Education
    Moon University, Moon, USA
    B.S. in Computer Science
    Expected Graduation Date: Spring 2012
    GPA: 3.37
    Involved in: Peanut Butter Lovers Club, Basketball Intramurals, Project Lead in Systems Design Group, Study Abroad - Ecuador

    could be your education area.

    This gives them all of the important details, and also gives some potential talking points for interviews "I love peanut butter, so I took initiative and started a club devoted to that".

    Group projects that you put a lot of work into or were an important figure in might be worth including, but I wouldn't include those that you just participated in.

    Finally, things like study abroad show that you are willing to try new places and new cultures where you may not be familiar but have the chance to adapt, much like joining a new company

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    Ah, exactly what I was looking for there, thanks

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