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    :) A little sad/dark short story.

    I do not write much.
    But when I do...
    I come up with stories like these:
    I hope you enjoy it, If not, OH WELL.
    hehe x3


    12:05am.
    September 24th, 2001


    She laid there gasping for air and screeching in pain. Her eyes were bloodshot. The bed had turned into a silky river of blood.
    I could not help but to smile.

    She looked the same way she did when she had given birth to our son in August.
    Afraid and alone, surrounded by shame and regret.
    She did not look at me, not once did her eyes meet mine.
    She only laid there.
    Her screams filled the silence of the hospital ward.

    I gave her everything.
    I gave her all.

    Her eyes followed me as I picked his body and held him close to me.
    The moment was perfect. Nothing had ever felt so perfect.
    He was beautiful.
    He had her eyes, her smile and her soft skin.
    I loved him.
    And oh how I loved her.

    She had a friend, a friend from work.
    She would always spend time with him.
    Her eyes would sparkle when she was with him.
    She would smile as if life had finally made sense to her.
    He would caress her skin so gently as he held her close when I was away at work.
    She did not see me when I came home that day.

    But I knew.
    When she gave birth to our son, I knew.
    I could only smile.
    Life had finally made sense to me.
    Her screams filled the silence of the years I had spent in misery.

    I told her I loved her.

    Her screams faded my words.
    I laid him on the bed next to her and pinned her down as I gave the last blow.
    It was her turn now.
    I put my hands over her mouth and I could feel her tears bathing my hands.
    I caressed her hair, kissing her neck so gently.
    I pressed harder onto her mouth
    Her eyes glued to me.
    She now looked at me.
    I took the knife and pierced her neck.
    Her eyes rolled back and she did not move.
    I felt at peace.

    I do not know why she did it.
    I gave her my all.
    But there was one thing I knew, that I was finally at peace.
    My screams filled the room, my tears bathed her cheeks.
    It was my turn now, one last rush of pain.
    He was so beautiful.
    Last edited by Linacake; 11-16-2012 at 05:30 AM.

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    It's so beautiful

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    Quote Originally Posted by Zachafer View Post
    It's so beautiful
    Thank you so much :'3 ♥

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    So beautiful! You're great, it's very nice and inspiring... i like it!

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    Quote Originally Posted by Naxerz View Post
    So beautiful! You're great, it's very nice and inspiring... i like it!
    *blush* thank you very much !!!! :'D!!!!

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    Quote Originally Posted by Linacake View Post
    *blush* thank you very much !!!! :'D!!!!
    Hope you write more stuff like this! I really like to read

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    It's wonderful dear

    But @Naxerz saying it's inspiring worries me a little
    Hopefully he just mean inspiring to write!

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    Quote Originally Posted by esperanto View Post
    It's wonderful dear

    But @Naxerz saying it's inspiring worries me a little
    Hopefully he just mean inspiring to write!
    Ahahaha i mean, inspiring to write! She writes wonderfull stuff, the way she writes all these things it's inspiring ^^

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    Lol Aww thanks again ^^

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    Your style is beautiful, I look forward to your next story

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