need french homework help

[annamia]

hi,

I need somebody to correct my french text. Will +rep for good correction.

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As you might see I had some problems with "elle" at the beginning of my sentences. Maybe you can find better words.
Thank you

[Reese]

I would replace some of the uses of 'elle' with her name, and check over your verbs(avoir)
Otherwise, looks good from here ^_^.